Writing: Appositive & Participles (2010.04.14)

[NextStep Admin]

Please reply with your 50 appositive sentences fixed up, and the 20 participial phrase sentences.

[Audrey Lyu]

PARTICIPIAL PHRASES:


1. Sitting in the bath tub for one hour, Harold had many wrinkles on his body.

2. Pulling the rope as hard as he can, Jack fell on his back several times while playing tug-o-war.

3. Watching the hippo eat its food for five minutes, George accidentally dropped his glasses in the hippo's den.

4. Staying in the bathroom for a short time, Harry's sister noticed that he didn't wash his hands.

5. Giving the elderly man a hard time, the little boy kept whining to the elder for some candy.

6. Swinging in the treetops of the vast jungle, the monkey was playing tag with his friends.

7. Looking at the artist at his work, the interviewer was taking notes and asking the artist questions.

8. Loitering in front of the store, the illegal aliens were littering and were very dirty.

9. Flapping its long wings up and down, the pelican was flying back to its nest.

10. Eating the rice-ball in his hand, the Japanese boy was eating dinner with his family.

11. Coloring the figures in his coloring-book, little Tommy was starting to get tired.

12. Walking on the hiking trail, Yolanda was breathing heavily due to her asthma.

13. Setting the tent up, Henry lost his balance and fell on top of the almost-finished tent.

14. Playing with Hobbes, Calvin made a tree house club that is officially called G.R.O.S.S.

15. Planting the tulips, Jill spelled out "joy" with the tulip bulbs.

16. Sipping the hot tea, Millie noticed that one of her crushed tea-leaf was floating.

17. Sniffing the ground, the blood-hound found the duck's scent and started running in its direction.

18. Making circles in the air, the butterfly was flying very gently and beautifully.

19. Giving his son a piggy-back-ride, Mike was singing a lullaby to have his son fall asleep.

20. Cooking a very special soup, Polly made a lot of mess.



Appositives : final draft

1. Jack, the man with the scary face and is clothed with dark clothes, is not good with children.
2. Mary, a very petite girl with very large feet, loves to run.
3. Peppero, a very delicious treat that is enjoyed by most children, has three different flavors.
4. Julie, the fourteen-year-old girl that will turn fifteen in July, wanted a birthday party.
5. Raccoons, the very pesky animals that look like burglars, love to dig out food in the garbage.
6. Mr. Patrick, the tallest teacher in the entire school, plays the piano.
7. Yellow, a very bright and flashy color that is categorized in the warmer area of the color wheel, symbolizes love.
8. John, the best-friend of Ricky since they were in preschool, cannot whistle.
9. Yolanda, the only girl that was absent in school, is sick today.
10. Mr. Bunny, the cuddly and adorable pet of Harriet, is a very gentle creature.
11. Honey, a very sweet and sticky food that was made naturally by honey bees, goes well with toast.
12. Mike, the shortest 5th-grade student in the classroom, loves to draw.
13. Cherries, the succulent and red-colored treat that is very sweet, have pits in them.
14. Rick, a very intelligent boy with the highest grades in the school, loves to read books.
15. Waldo, a character in a extremely well-known book called "Where's Waldo?", is usually hard to spot.
16. Monkeys, the very intelligent creatures that come from the same family as humans, love to eat bananas.
17. Chuck, the shy one that is called names very frequently, is very silent and calm.
18. Hilary, a nice and friendly girl that has a numerous number of friends, loves to talk.
19. Cats, the very stealthy creatures are very quiet and still, have long tails.
20. Chickens, the ones that are very tender when cooked, are perfect for Christmas meals.
21. George, an antisocial person who feels that everybody but him is an idiot, stays home a lot.
22. Phil, my next-door neighbor that is not popular in school, cannot keep a secret.
23. Haruko, my Japanese friend that used to live in California but moved, can speak both Japanese and English.
24. Camels, the animals that are good for traveling in desert areas, can spend hours without water.
25. Dogs, the very loyal and sweet animals that are also known as "Man's best friend", love to be praised by their owner.
26. Landon, the only boy in his family, the Wongs, loves to play baseball.
27. Jill, a helpful person that is very well-known around the school campus, loves to give lectures to fellow classmates.
28. Jacob, the only student without a cell phone because his mom won't give one to him, wants one really badly.
29. Tommy, the youngest boy in 4th grade and is very smart for his age, is only seven years old.
30. Flamingos, very beautiful birds to look at because of their brightly colored feathers, get their pink color from what they eat.
31. T-shirts, one of my most favored clothing in my whole entire closet, is a comfortable top.
32. Polly, a very wealthy girl that lives in a gigantic house, is very thrifty.
33. Penguins, the birds that have black and white feathers and use them for swimming, are good swimmers.
34. Candy, the sugary and sweet-tasting treats that give joy to children AND adults, can give you cavities.
35. Ramen, a very spicy food with hot and steamy soup with chewy noodles, can give you cancer.
36. Bill, a very wealthy businessman that is very stressed with his job, is the father of Polly.
37. Eugene, a boy proned with ADD and all of his classmates think he isn't bright, is a very wise thinker.
38. Mr. Harrison, my music teacher that is hated by 80% of my classmates, can be very strict.
39. Willy, the class-clown who is also made fun of every day, is very sad.
40. Horses, the very strong and athletic animals that live in spacey fields, are known for running.
41. Cars, the motorized vehicles that can drive up to 200 miles per hour, are also known for speed and appearance.
42. Elephants, the gigantic creatures that roam in big continents that are similar to Africa, are scared of stepping on smaller animals.
43. Selena, the obese child that has just found out about the truth about obesity, started exercising one week ago.
44. Turtles, the hard-shelled animals that hide in their shells very often because of their saftey, hibernate in the winter.
45. My mom, a math tutor that can be very strict with her children and students, gives me tons of algebra homework.
46. My dad, the smartest man in the family that loves to calculate math problems and read history books, can be very silly sometimes.
47. Teddy, my 1st dog that twirls around when he is happy, is a Yorkshire Terrier.
48. Whiskers, a very mean cat that used to my my grandmother's cat, was de-clawed.
49. Magellan, a very famous explorer with the first crew to circumnavigate the entire world, died in the middle of the journey.
50. Uncle Bruce, the teacher of class 102 that told us the vocabulitis motto, "Redundancy and Over study", made his students write 50 appositive sentences for homework.

[JihyunKim]

Participial phrase

1.Running too fast on the track for school an athletic meet, Robbert twisted his legs.
2.Drinking hot water too fast at the restaurant when her birthday, Jennifer burned her tongue on the water.
3.Eatting food too much at the food buffet festival, Robert went emergency because he got stomachache.
4.Making a esoteric and cryptic message, Levy made this message but he could not solve his message.
5.Jumping on the tenth step to first step like a hero, Lucus broken his leg and arms too.
6.Talking with comciliatory words everyday, Harry called nice person in his class.
7.Dismissing his friends idea when they workinhg a project with friends, Arbert dismissed his idea by his friends.
8.Eatting lunch with her friends under the freshman tree in Fullerton High School, Berenice felt sluggish after lunch.
9.Doing experiment of the vaporize the liquid, Jerry understood the principle of the vaporize.
10.Practicing to make a chocolate cookies for her firend's birthday present, Barnes burned her cookies because she mistaked to adjust the timer.
11.Concentraning on his work that is big project and worth 100 points to the grade, Roberto got 98 points from his big project.
12.Cleaning her room with her sister with the greatest care, her room messed up again after two days.
13.Singing a song by harmonious sounds at the contest, Jasmine was really good and the audience was suprised too but she failed on it; it was dance contest.
14.Playing basketball and practicing a dunk shot at the Fullerton school, Harry couldn't come down from the basket.
15.Watching TV when waiting for boiling a kimchi stew, Jisoo forgot to turn off the gas stove so kimchi stew's soup was gone.
16.Laughing loudly when reading a comic cartoons with his friends at the book store, Luis threw out by the worker of the book store.
17.Playing hide-and-seek with his friends in the play ground, Bobert slept at his secret place so his friends couldn't find him.
18.Watching a video on Youtube that video is about some guy is singing a song with playing guitar, Juila fell in love right away.
19.Listening to music and dancing wildly in her room on the bed, Kathy dropped her ipod and she was cried.
20.Using computer secretly and giggling when she is studying, Lindsay was caught by her mother so she won't use the computer after one week.

Fixed Appositive
1.My brother, very cute dude, is loves me.
2.My brother, the smartest student in his class, is also tallest student too.
3.Obama, The President of United States, is eloquent speaker.
4.Mrs.Chang, beautiful my English teacher, is erudite.
5.Dr.Norman, main character in the story "Sphere", is psychologist.
6.Mr.Ted, most smartes character in the story "Sphere", halping them to figure out about the spacecreft.
7.Napoleon, a ruler and he tried to rule the animal in the story "Anlmal Farm", is failure.
8.Benjamin, is third person in the story "Animal Farm" because watched them and did not take part in, is not participant.
9.Justin Bieber, a famous and young musicion, is also a singer in the America.
10.Jisoo, going to the Washington D.C, is excited, and expect.
11.Jennifer, is high school student and she is finding the words from dictonary, using that words on her essay.
12.Jennifer, a class president of our class, would working hard for our class.
13.Mr.K, smartest my English teacher on Monday and Wednesday, would be Mrs.Chang's brother.
14.Mr.K, a funny teacher from ustream and skype, is funnier than grammar.
15.Mrs.Weber, Art class teacher in the Fuullerton Union High School, teaching Spanish class too.
16.My friend, a smartest student and cool dude, forgot to bring her homeworks.
17.My best friend, Robbert's friend ; she is confiding in me her secrets, is trust me.
18.Shower window, can not throught to see, is opaque.
19.My dog, a cute dog in my family, is eatting my own homework.
20.Rose, a elegant and beautiful flower, also having a passion in her color.
21.Levy, a good person, who is cooking up a bunch for dinner, likes cooking for his family.
22.The sun, a very bright on the sky, couldn't be close with moon.
23.My brother, a mischivous boy who is calling to his father using cell phone, trying to say something to father about me.
24.My pencil case, a thin and blue and it is hugging with my pencil and eraser, would likes my pencil and eraser.
25.My friend, a picky boy who is going to the beach with her friends, forgot to bring her suncream.
26.Harry, really generous man who went to the sphere in some hours, couldn't remember all happens.
27.Harry, healthy and very erudite guy who hates squid though likes shrimps, couldn't eat any squid at the dinner.
28.Ted, tallest man in the group who want to solve the cryptic number of message, getting interesing on it.
29.Jessica, a Jasmine's friend who made some lemonade with cookies for garage sale, ate everything because she was hungry.
30.Su Kang, one of my best friend, met me at the St.Thomas church.
31.Jessi, same table with me in the art class, forgot to eat lunch.
32.My brother, antagonistic boy, turining around and around and around.
33.Jihyun, one of student is having superficial knowledge of grammar, studying grammar and vocabulary too.
34.Beethoven, famous composer of classical music, is lose his hearing.
35.Albert Einstein, the troublemaker when he was young, is invented a lot of things.
36.Jihyun,scrupulous student who is Finished reading a book "Sphere", is content and doing her homework.
37.Beyonce, one of the famous and beautiful singer in the America, singing a song by harmonious sounds.
38.Jessica, cheerleader of the Fullerton middle scool, is haughty cheerleader.
39.Johnson, one of hypocritical church member, loves his church.
40.Teddy bear, soft, big and cute doll on my bed, would be my friend on the bed.
41.Maria, a basketball player, made 17 points out of the 21 points.
42.Emma, very gererous nun in the church, prayed a lot for many people.
43.Kevin, famous doctor in the Fullerton Orange County, diagnosed a lot of poor patients for free.
44.Raphaela, one of the an archangel, stayed side of the God.
45.Su Kang, very nice and cool, just got intersting in facebook.
46.Diana, my friend in Fullerton High School, played basketball with me every times.
47.Phuong, very cool and pretty person in my biology class,was my same P.E class last semester.
48.Phong. flipino but born in America,likes Korean songs.
49.Johnson, very nice teacher, is my new English teacher in my English class.
50.Shawn, very cute chinchla, is living in my Spanish teacher's house.

[Grant Lee]

1. Jacob, a stupid boy who hates his life, jumped off a cliff.
2. Michael, a great basketball player that gets the ball in the basket 50% of the time, is tall.
3.Ethan, a nerdy nerd that most people hate, reads all the time in sorrow.
4.Joshua, a religious man that believes that god made him a chosen one, goes to church all the time.
5.Daniel, an nonreligious man that hates god and always blasphemes all the time, never goes to church.
6. Alexander,a great general who was very cruel and killed all the people that was weak, made great battle plans.
7. Anthony, a real bad criminal that killed many people and stole all the people's money and resplendent clothes, did many more crimes.
8. William, a murderous murderer that would put a gun in front of a rich man and threatened for money often killed the person, will be going to jail.
9. Christopher, a gory explorer is known to be one of the most important explorer; however most people need to think twice and think how many indigenous people, explored great places.
10. Matthew, a man that had made history by being one of the best Olympics athlete, has become a beggar.
11. Emma, a smart scholar who studied on a daily basis by waking up at 3 in the morning and sleeping at 10, will be going to Brown.
12. Isabella, an f student who is a college student who is still in elementary school math and all she can read are short sentences, is a straight F student.
13. Emily, a girl that is a transfer student from England and stayed there a long time and was also born there, has a strong accent.
14. Madison, a lackadaisical girl who plays in the field at recess, and when the teacher is talking she is sleeping, learns nothing the teacher says.
15. Ava, a girl who is a glutton eats every single meal, eats ad nauseum.
16. Olivia, a quitting quitter was such a quieter that if anything is wrong at or when she is doing anything she quits, quit school after she got bad grades.
17.Sophia, a girl who loves soap plays with the slippery soap and loves making bubbles, accidentally ate soap.
18. Abigail, a girl that reads all the time so when you see her she is reading, in the car or in the bathroom, read Sphere in two days.
19. Elizabeth, the high positioned queen who loves to wear things like Prada, Louis Vitton, a and Hermes, wears expensive clothes.
20. Chloe, the maker of ice cream who found the way of making it and discovering how delicious it is, eats chocolate than ice cream.
21.Kevin, a boy plays the cello is a pro and is planning to attend to Julliard, can read and play music.
22. Donald, a hilarious duck who is Mickey Mouse's friend, has a funny accent.
23.Kenneth, a boy who plays sports so much that he wants to get a scholarship with it, loves to play hockey.
24. Jessica, a boy who swims loves Michael Phelps and always cheers for him, wants to grow up to be a swimmer.
25. Susan, a girl who can swim loves many swimmers that are skillful, is prepared for a meet.
26.Timothy, a boy who plays golf an always plays golf and hates to miss a day, respects Tiger Woods as an idol.
27. Jason, a boy who is funny that wants to grow up to be a comedian, was invited to comedy central.
28. Ronald, a boy who likes Macdonald's can eat one of their big hamburgers in a minute, goes there every day.
29.Lisa, a girl who is obese because she ate so much, sat on her cat and killed her cat.
30.Jeffery, a boy who has the IQ 1000 beats all the geniuses by many IQ points, never does his homework.
31.Karen, a girl who teaches and has fun with many kids by playing many games, enjoys her job as a teacher.
32.Sarah, a girl who is happy from winning the lottery, seeing Brad Pitt and getting his autograph, and reuniting with her parents, jumped up and down happily.
33.George, a boy who is curious and would go to the museum to touch all the exhibits that were hands on, touched everything.
34.Edward, a mental psycho man that knew nothing, loved hurting himself, and was always drinking, jumped off a cliff.
35. Nancy, a girl who loves mystery and was famous for always able to find the mystery first even before Sherlock Holmes, helped Sherlock Holmes.
36.Ryan, a boy who can read many books at once and even enjoyed reading the books, read Green eggs and ham.
37. Eric, a boy who can jump and is very fat that every day he eats 5 hot dogs in the morning, jumped a crack.
38.Gary, a boy who is slow so slow that if he were to race a snail he would lose so bad to the snail even though he were to run as fast he could, lost a race to a car.
39.Ashley, a girl who loves matches was so bad that that the police put her on the future arsonist list, burned her whole house and family.
40.Douglas, a boy who loves grass in fact that he would sometimes eat it on accident, jumped on to grass and cracked glass.
41.Katherine, a girl who loves carrots that she would eat one bag of orange carrots that contains 120 carrots a day, lost her 20 karat tooth eating a carrot.
42. Aaron, a boy who is fond of ponds he was so fond of ponds that every day or every morning even anytime, jumped in to a pond.
43.Adam, a boy who jumped down a fathom to do many things like finding special rocks on a sea floor, To catch some fish, and many more, loved the pressure.
44.Julie, a girl who loves jewels loves jewels so much that she would try to eat some for they were very addicting to her, ate jelly.
45. Anna, a boy who loves bananas so much that she says that she could eat bananas for every meal and snack, wore bandannas.
46.Zachary, a boy who hates celery Zach hates celery very much so if you were to give him some he would throw up ,ate carrots instead
47.Jose, a man that expects to get Bose speakers; if you were to give him a different brand he would throw them away, threw away the Sony speakers.
48.Steven, a boy who is very even in fact if you were to give him a odd number he said that he would die, will go to heaven.
49. Paul, a boy who likes to call ad nausea in fact Paul talks more than any person on the face of the Earth, does not like to fall.
50.James, a boy who aims at lame people that are party poopers, no fame people, and nerds, has no fame.

[Grant Lee]

20 participial phrases

1. Using a chainsaw and also checking his email on his iPhone then laughing at the goofy pictures, Edward cut of his fingers.
2. Using a hammer carelessly and talking to a bird that he could not understand, Bob nailed his fingers.
3. Manipulating a saw to cut some wood to make a house but not following the safety precautions which were to pay attention, Jacob sawed of his hand.
4. Trying to pull the mysterious string that was tied to a hammer, Michael ended up with a hammer banged on his head.
5. Standing still in target position with a red circle with a white background on his shirt, Ethan got a rock thrown at his stomach.
6. Bothering a big guy by saying pessimistic things about him ,Alex got punched in the face by the big guy.
7. Getting into a big gang fight in Chicago where it is pretty dark with dangerous people, Joe got kicked by one of the gang members.
8. After getting arrested OJ tried to escape from prison with gun and met a guard, OJ got killed by the guard.
9. Using an advanced calculator to solve a problem that Dante had gotten from Wal-Mart in Redmond, WA, Dante got the answer.
10. Using a net that was made of three simple things, net, metal, and wood, Mandy caught the frog.
11. Eating a quadruple patty burger from in and out in just about 30 seconds and 00 milliseconds, Frodo threw up.
12. Seeing a crazy highwayman coming up the street with a nuke saying that he was going to throw it, Tom shot the man.
13. When a strange little boy with a toy gun that said bird killer and came running towards the bird, the bird flew.
14. When the driver inside the red corvette was not paying much attention to the way he was driving, the car crashed.
15. When there were a whole bunch of ninjas, terrorists, men with guns, and samurais, Cam sprang into action.
16. Right after Joe said really bad things about Anthony’s mom and cussed at him, Anthony became mad.
17. A lady was walking with a very expensive bag from Hermes, Dan robbed the lady.
18. Right after the blank gun was shot by the short little referee, Nom ran.
19. Ten days after the first war Germany decided to end it with the WMD, the bomb dropped.
20. On the first day when a whole army of men with spears came after Yan at fierce rage, Yan fought.